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- Original: and took the place of his father, however his desire to regain the land his father had given away, and continued unrest within his house left Louis vulnerable.Edit: and took the place of his father; however, his desire to regain the land his father had given away and continued unrest within his house left Louis vulnerable.
- Original: Seven cities grew at a rate as the nomadicEdit: what do you mean by "at a rate" ?rapidly? unusually so? prosperity reigned?
- Original: Gradually throughout the next centuryEdit: eliminate "generally"
- Original: he allocatedEdit: who is "he" - the king? better phrasing might be..."throughout his life, the seven were allocated an adjoining..." or - "throughout his life, the king allocated"
- Original: was forcing him to find evermore devious ways of ensuring his father’s days as ruler were numbered.Edit: was catalyst for Louis' increasingly devious plans to ensure the end of his father's rule.
- Original: Unbeknown to most of those who inhabited what is now known as modern day France,Edit: Confusing and unnecessary preamble to this sentence.
- Original: A summer's evening under the cloak of darkness seven knights rode from Paris in search of a new life.Edit: During a summer's evening under the cloak of darkness seven knights rode from Paris in search of a new life.
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